14 Nisan 2014 Pazartesi

        DIVISION ESSAY                                                             11.04.2014        

                         THE FEAST OF RAMAZAN

 There are many important religious feasts for Muslims. They are two, including feast of Ramazan and feast of Kurban. These feasts are the most important days for Muslims. It is thought that the Muslims closer to each other in these feasts. These feasts have a different properties. One of the most important feasts is that feast of Ramazan. People make ​​many preparations for this feast.They want to meet guests in the best way.

   Firstly, all Muslims are fasting during the month of Ramazan  while they are fasting and helping to poor people . Morover,they organize dinner for iftar and invite their neigbours, friends and relations. I think that iftar meals are  one of the most beautiful features of Ramazan because people become close to each other.Furthermore,we can eat meal with many people  who we don’t know their names  in big iftar dinner. After people fasted during month, they are rewarded with a feast of Ramazan. Actually, all Muslims wait this feast during the month of Ramazan.
  
     Secondly,guests have always been a big importance for Muslims.People give a big importance to guests in this month.They begin to prepare  in advance. They prefer to do something sweetened such as Baklava, Kadayıf. How they are doing these desserts ? It is the most beautiful thing.In some areas,women gathered in a house and they made their own desserts. Thus, they have made them easier and quicker. Moreover,one of the most popular thing is that everybody cleans their houses before feast.  After than,  the feast day, which is waited by everybody, come and  everybody is happy and exited. Everybody hug and kiss each other.The hands of elder people are kissed  and  wanted children  to be happy so elder people give money them. People visit each other during feast and are offered sweet, dessert and coffee. They chat with each other while eating something.

   Thirdly,ıf you have a crowded family,feast is more beautiful for you because your  relations came to your home for feast. You can chat with them,who you haven’t seen for a long time,and eat meal altogether. Furthermore, the most important thing is that people shouldn’t fall out with each other. If they are falled out each other, they should make a peace with each other because the feast is peace, brotherhood and love.

  In short,the feast of Ramazan is the most meaningful and beautiful day for Muslims.This feast is most important feast  for them because of their religion and culture.I think that new generations are taught this cultural values such as kissing  elder people and visiting elder people. They have never give their cultures up.

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  1. 1)including feast of Ramazan and feast of Kurban.(missing article)
    2) It is thought that the Muslims closer to each other in these feasts.(missing verb)
    3)a different properties (sing-plu)
    4) missing controlling ideas.
    5) all Muslims are fasting during the month of Ramazan while they are fasting and helping to poor people (chance tense)
    6)After people fasted during (missing article) month, they are rewarded with a (change the article) feast of Ramazan.
    7) They begin to prepare in advance.(meaning is not clear.)
    8) women gathered in a house and they made their own desserts.(chance the tense)
    9) the feast day, which is waited by everybody, come / Everybody hug and kiss each other.(subject verb agreement)
    10) .The hands of elder people are kissed and wanted children to be happy so elder people give money them.(the structure of sentence is wrong, check it)
    11)ıf you have a crowded family,(missing article)feast is more beautiful for you because your relations came (wrong tense)to your home for feast
    12)I think that new generations are taught (wrong structure) this cultural values such as kissing elder people and visiting elder people. They (add a modal) have never give their cultures up.

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  2. 1) There are many important religious feasts for Muslims. They are two, including feast of Ramazan and feast of Kurban.---> Revise this sentence ( many religious feasts------ they are two)
    2) This feast is most important feast for them because of their religion and culture. ---> missing an article
    3) How they are doing these desserts ? ---> wrong verb and wrong structure
    4) ıf ---> spelling mistake

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  3. Everybody hug and kiss each other.----I know that when we use everybody,we use singular verb.

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